Over the break, I went back home to India. I was really happy to meet all my family and all my friends. I had a good trip and made many memories that I will remember.
| This is my good friend ,Nishika and me.(Original photo) |
| This is me and my brothers outside the house.(Original photo) |
| (Picture from Google) |
| This was just before we took off(Original photo) |
School was starting in a couple of days so, it was time to come back to Thailand. Everything was going smooth, till there was a message from the flight assistant. "So,we are having so technical difficulties with the airplane. We are calling some people to work on it so, hopefully we will be able to take off in 20-30 minutes." I was terrified. As the plane was taking off, my brother and I were looking at each other just hoping that we wouldn't die.I quickly grabbed his arm and hugged him. I shut my eyes close and started to pray. The moment I felt myself in the air, I opened my and looked over at my mom. She smiled at me. I looked out the window and saw clouds. I was still nervous so I quickly plugged my headphones in and started to watch a movie. That got me distracted for the flight. I was just happy I survived and that everything was fine in the end!
Writing (E): Jane, thank you for sharing the emotional tenor of your vacation! I could tell from the beginning that I was in good hands. What was the first indication that it was going to be meaningful blog post? Well, you had an introduction that explained where you were going and your general experience, which showed me that this was the work of a budding young author! Here was one of my favorite parts: "The moment I made eye contact with them, they rushed to hug me. They treated me normally, which was good. I was just afraid of some kind of rivalry between us since I hadn't seen them in years." You showed some serious empathy for your friends, and we have all had that feeling of not being sure if something has changed over the years. Also, I adored this line of pure poetry: "we were so high up in the mountains that clouds were actually passing through our house from room to room!" After reading this line, my wife and I want to go to India!
ReplyDeleteLanguage (M):
*When I had told them I was coming a couple months ago and they were really happy. (When I had told them a couple of months before that I was coming, they were really happy.)
*talking right away.We enjoyed
*It was really hard saying goodbye, I think I cried.
*cause (because)
(FYI, you accidentally duplicated a sentence about your aunt inviting you to the station)
*sick.It was
*so, it was time (the comma goes before the so)
*die.I quickly
Reflection (E): You took your vacation and processed it as a story in a meaningful way. Even though it was a short journal entry, there was something possessed and strong about the way you told it. I am looking forward to reading your future short stories when you have more time and create a full scenario for your imagination.